Hi, I need someone to correct my below answer to the AAS scholarship question. Thank you.
apply for a Senior Accountant/Auditor position
Upon my return, I plan to apply for a Senior Accountant/Auditor position in one of the Chartered Accounting firms or Non-Government Organizations. I believe with the accounting and auditing skills gained from my studies will be a tool to prepare financial audits or preparation of accounts. I am also planning to apply and teach part-time accounting with the University of the South Pacific - Emalus as this will be a chance to transfer the accounting and auditing knowledge to others.
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Your response is too busy. You are going to accomplish 2 goals simultaneously? Or will this be over a period of time? Focus on the easiest and most immediate accomplishment you can attain upon your return. Either share the information you learned by becoming a full time (not part time) teacher or, become a regular accountant at a firm. As far as I am concerned the information and knowledge transfer as a teacher will be more impressive than just becoming a regular accountant upon your return. There needs to be a bigger mission or sense of importance for your desire to study in Australia. You don't get that from the response that you will return to your country and become a Senior Accountant or Auditor.
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